Friday, October 21, 2011

Flipped


Coated in sunshine, she surfed the sea’s surface ‘til a rogue wave flipped the craft. The pleasure boat was now her tomb as the icy blackness consumed her.


Write On Edge: Red-Writing-HoodCould not get my muse to play any music last night.  First thing this morning, before my lids fully opened, this popped into my head.

Our prompt, at Write on Edge, has us writing microfiction with a 160 character limit that 'elicit's or expresses fear'.  What do you think?


18 comments:

  1. This is great! I love the contrast between light and dark. "Coated in sunshine" and "icy blackness"

    When your muse kicks in she kicks some serious tail. I really love this!

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  2. Can your muse come visit my house sometime?

    I loved this. Unique. Terrifying. Nicely written!

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  3. I like this, because it's a "realistic" scary. It really taps into any fear concerning water, that's for sure!

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  4. "Icy blackness". That just sent chills.

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  5. I feel the fear!! Drowning scares me. You packed a punch in just a few words.

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  6. I am afraid of this kind of thing, which is why i love looking at the ocean but swimming in the pool...you know?

    Great Job Karen, your muse was right on!

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  7. Drowning is one of my biggest fears!

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  8. Love this! So few words, but what an impact they have!

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  9. Drowning would definitely be terrifying. I love how it's realistic too. Great job.

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  10. This is definitely scary. The ocean is a beautiful vixen that I have full proper respect of. The only way you could have scared me more was to throw a shark in there.

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  11. it starts out so light and airy and warm...and swiftly goes to the opposite end of the spectrum. Life moves fast, anything can happen...and isn't that the scariest thing of all?

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  12. This is why I don't like boats. I just like admiring water from shore. Definitely scary to think about what to do in this situation.

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  13. Lovely! "Coated in sunshine" is very powerful and makes the end much more scary.

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  14. Oh, god. Horrible.

    Well done!

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  15. This was so perfectly crafted. Each word exquisite. And the shift? Breathtaking.

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