Coated in sunshine, she surfed the sea’s surface ‘til a rogue wave flipped the craft. The pleasure boat was now her tomb as the icy blackness consumed her.
Could not get my muse to play any music last night. First thing this morning, before my lids fully opened, this popped into my head.
Our prompt, at Write on Edge, has us writing microfiction with a 160 character limit that 'elicit's or expresses fear'. What do you think?
This is great! I love the contrast between light and dark. "Coated in sunshine" and "icy blackness"
ReplyDeleteWhen your muse kicks in she kicks some serious tail. I really love this!
Can your muse come visit my house sometime?
ReplyDeleteI loved this. Unique. Terrifying. Nicely written!
I like this, because it's a "realistic" scary. It really taps into any fear concerning water, that's for sure!
ReplyDeleteSo cold...
ReplyDelete"Icy blackness". That just sent chills.
ReplyDeleteI feel the fear!! Drowning scares me. You packed a punch in just a few words.
ReplyDeleteI am afraid of this kind of thing, which is why i love looking at the ocean but swimming in the pool...you know?
ReplyDeleteGreat Job Karen, your muse was right on!
Drowning is one of my biggest fears!
ReplyDeleteLove this! So few words, but what an impact they have!
ReplyDeleteDrowning would definitely be terrifying. I love how it's realistic too. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThis is definitely scary. The ocean is a beautiful vixen that I have full proper respect of. The only way you could have scared me more was to throw a shark in there.
ReplyDeleteit starts out so light and airy and warm...and swiftly goes to the opposite end of the spectrum. Life moves fast, anything can happen...and isn't that the scariest thing of all?
ReplyDeleteThis is why I don't like boats. I just like admiring water from shore. Definitely scary to think about what to do in this situation.
ReplyDeleteLovely! "Coated in sunshine" is very powerful and makes the end much more scary.
ReplyDeleteChilling poetry is what this is!
ReplyDeleteOh, god. Horrible.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
This was so perfectly crafted. Each word exquisite. And the shift? Breathtaking.
ReplyDeleteOh that's chilling!
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